Sela Locke

Yeah, it was really a complete random - thing. I think that it just helped me to get out some of my own energy in a way more productive than ...

Ooh, thanks! I'll go over those soon. =D Yes, I'm glad I did, since sometimes they do act younger - then - older. Like so. xD THANKSAGAIN -SELA

I know that this is two chapters in a row, but I couldn't leave y'all hanging! Enjoy. =D C H A P T E R T E N Delys snorted, ...

C H A P T E R N I N E He started pacing distractedly, apparently not noticing when his foot came down hard on her arm. Aslina closed her ...

C H A P T E R E I G H T “And… you were only lying to us, back when you used your talent? You actually enjoy that pleading; ...

I don't have time to go through your whole critique just yet - however, thank you in advance! xD I hope I c'n get to it soon. ;-; - Edit: ...

I've enjoyed Steph Meyer, but this was still amusing. =D Although it needs to be LONGER! Gah. xD

What I mean is, all you do is tell everything. It makes the entire story boring.

I have this strange feeling you copied me. Mostly because you did, but yeah. =D

Less tell, more show is all I can find to say. It's a rather big problem. ;-;

'Sitting alone in my room,' Never, ever, ever use these words in this sequence again.

Yes - some. But you still tell a lot. It will get better with practice and over time. =D I just commented on your Alladin story. Interesting, but too much ...

C H A P T E R S E V E N “So… are there any other va- I mean, any more of Delys’ kind in these woods?” She knew ...

Love it, love it, LOVE IT! You are really, really improving. A LOT. I really can't believe how much better you are. The descriptions were better, and Alicia seemed realer ...

The funny thing is, well... I didn't that totally unconsciously. I'm just drawn to forests, dahhling. Ah well, SB is moving along nicely, and I believe I have plenty of ...